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I wish I could give this book a glowing review. I will say this much: the idea for the story had potential and I really wish that the author and editor had taken more time on this. It could have been great! The execution was the problem. ****************RANT/SPOILERS**************** 1) The story is predictable to a fault. You're sitting there, shouting at the book going, "OF COURSE NOR IS GONE!" and then they find out Nor is gone. Shocker. Your mother called Roine by the name of an old warrior in private? It couldn't possibly be because that's who he really is! I mean, he found out his mother had a secret identity, why wouldn't her friends? 2) The characters are as ignorant as possible, and Tan is a seventeen year old with the common sense of a toddler. Of course he's special, but for some reason he keeps denying it. "Me? I can't be special! I'm just me!" 3) There is no emotional attachment to the characters. I don't give a flying hoot about what happens to Tan, although it would disrupt the (very confusing) story line. I really don't care about Amia. And when Tan's mother, Cobin and Bal all go missing, I didn't shed a tear because I didn't feel a connection to them. 4) If someone tilts their head or "scrubs" their face/hair again, I AM GOING TO THROW MY KINDLE! Damn it, pick a new descriptive! Any descriptive! I don't care! I can't count how many times someone scrubbed their face! I think I'm going to update this with an actual count, because it's terrible. 5) The editing is sloppy. I have found so many grammatical errors, spaces missing, blatant mispellings of simple words, missing words, sentences that do not add to the story and should have been taken out. This book could have been edited down to a short story and it would have been better. 6) Nothing is explained. What do the hounds look like? Why are they difficult to track? Supposedly they're really scary and powerful, but Tan kills like... 6 of them? How are they any different than regular dogs then? And Roine is concerned about facing one licinsend, but when he faces three, he kills two of them no problem and keeps on going. Not even remotely believable. At least make it a challenge! What does Tan look like? Bal? Cobin? I don't know. Why is Incinden at war with them? I don't know!!! None of it makes sense!! 7) I can't picture most of the story. The author took no time to paint a mental image, and it's disappointing. 8) It's like a fanfiction crossover between Avatar: The Last Airbender (shaper?) and Eragon. A young hero gets called on an adventure by an old man and meets a girl from a special group whom he falls in love with. He's being chased by evil creatures and discovering his abilities while trying to protect the kingdom. Eragon, and Chased by Fire, in a nutshell. ***************END RANT/SPOILERS************* I wish I could give this story a good review, but no. It made me angry the entire time. I did have hope the entire time. I had hope it could get better, and it impressed me at points, but it never really got better. The thing that really pushed me to write a review in the first place was the amount of times I read "scrubbed". It's ridiculous!