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Okay, I apologize in advance to those who have given such glowing reviews. I have to be honest and say that this is an in-process review. I have not finished reading this book, and sincerely hope, based on the very positive reviews already posted here, that I can. One word. EDITING. Okay, maybe a few more... I wish, wish, wish that authors who self-publish would simply invest the couple hundred dollars it would take to have a manuscript professionally edited. I assure you,the payoff would be worth it. More people would look for additional books to purchase from those authors, and publishers would be more likely to take a second glance (see Heather Killough-Walden as an example). I, personally, will NEVER purchase another title from an author after struggling through missing commas, improper apostrophes, run-on sentences, etc... despite how compelling the story may be. It's too difficult. I get so thrown out the story - so frequently - that I start editing before my mind can process what I'm reading. That's the case for this book. I have made it halfway through chapter 4 and had to put my Kindle down to write this review. I want to read this book. I want to love it. I can tell that there is potentially a great story here, but so far I can barely keep track of what's happening. I lost my focus on the storyline while counting missing commas (123 so far, but I'm estimating since I didn't write it down). I will attempt to edit this review after (if) I finish reading. Follow-up review. I tried. I really tried. I did get several more chapters after firmly attempting to ignore my inner editor. And I succeeded, mostly. Then I realized that I was still having trouble following what/who/where/pov-whose? I'm sorry Denise. I just think that you need to refine your craft a bit more. Read other books and compare. Rewrite and republish a corrected/re-edited version. As it stands, I can't recommend this. I feel generous changing it down to only a 2 star. I'm sorry.