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The main reason I am writing this review here is because I am tired of hearing only positive things about this book. I find it misleading and I know that there are many other better written stories for our readers. Chris Colfer is an actor on the television show Glee, and this book reads like a long drawn out screenplay. Descriptions are either nonexistent or so basic that my students could paint a far better image. When describing a cavalcade of knights arriving in front the twins, Colfer describes them only by saying: "Their armor was clean and shiny." OK... Colfer puts most of his story in the dialogue and the narration seems to be just a means to link those speaking parts together. He misses the beauty that can go into a well written narrative. A story should not leave its reader breaking away from the flow to consider how awkwardly written it is. Truly though, I could go on and on, and that would be too harsh. So, here are a few things that bothered me in a (sort of) list: The extreme overuse of poor similes: "Mrs. Peters was staring at her as if she had just witnessed a gruesome rural animal give birth." (I couldn't think of a gruesome rural animal...pig, cow, mouse. Dunno.) "Alex clambered up the tree faster than any animal she had ever seen in a documentary." (Doesn't that just flow off the lips.) Compares the witch with the gingerbread house to: "...staring at her as if she were a rabid Tyranosaurus rex about to pounce on them at any moment." (#1 rabid T-rex. #2 would pounce be the best word to describe the movement of a T-rex? #3 the word rabies makes, I believe, 3 appearances. At least one more I flagged when the twins come upon some unicorns. ) The similes go on and on and on and on... Lack of revision. If Colfer spent any time at all revising this novel we would not see the following phrase appear so often: "Steam was practically coming out of the teacher's ears and nostrils." pg.75 "Steam was practically coming out of their nostrils." pg. 361 "...Conner said. Steam was practically coming from his ears." pg. 164 Some of the writing just simply strikes me the wrong way. Like when Conner sees the gingerbread house on page 112. "'Whoa,' Conner said. 'I feel like I might get diabetes from just looking at that place." Overall, the story is so horribly written that I BEG Colfer's editor to help him make the next book in the series a bit smoother. The plot of the book doesn't bother me. I can fall into the most fantastical storyline and believe every line of it. But that is where the hard work on the author's part comes in. Colfer must read more to become a better writer. This is not a script, it is a novel. Go on, tell me I'm wrong. I can take it.