Bests & Worsts Reviews from Amazon

I was afraid to write this critical review because of the negative comments that I will probably receive as a result. However, I must follow my conscience. If readers only posted glowing reviews then every book would be a Nobel Prize winner. To be fair, the plot is fine--if you like pulp fiction. There is nothing wrong with pulp fiction. Pulps are those low-priced magazines and paperbacks with bigger-than-life heroes, pretty girls, and mysterious villains that were popular with young working adults and teenagers. In fact, the writer is very talented in coming up with dramatic scenes and action that is very typical of pulp fiction. I believe that if he found a good editor or better yet, several good editors who would be willing to work with improving his writing style, I think he could be an outstanding author. But he is not there yet. The writing style seems unpolished, like it was a first draft needing serious comments and markups. Another reviewer commented about several elements that bothered her with style. She complained about the constant use of incomplete sentences. That is true but I elaborate and state that the entire book is composed of paragraphs that are one or two sentences long and many of those sentences are only phrases, not sentences. Example 1: Inside his heart, a rage was building. Aimed not at the men who had come after them but at himself. Example 2: The badly tuned engine gunned, and the van hurtled across the lot. Aimed straight at the door of the motel room Cahill just exited. Example 3: Before he could do anything more than that, Cahill was at the door. And put two hollow-points into the man's forehead. This is how the ENTIRE book reads. With the above sentence structure, most of the book is very narrative. Example: First sentence begins, "A second later..." Next sentence/paragraph continues "A second after that....." The book lacks a balance of setting up a descriptive landscape scene, putting action in the scene and utilizing conversation to give the characters personality. I would give the book a one-star rating. The writing style is that bad. However, the author does have potential with his storyline itself. So I bumped the rating up to two stars.